Showing posts with label realistic dialogue. Show all posts
Showing posts with label realistic dialogue. Show all posts

Creating Characters: Make 'Em Memorable

Wednesday, March 29, 2023

By far, my most favorite part of the writing process is creating characters. It doesn’t matter if it’s a novel or flash fiction, I can sit all day—and often do!—coming up with dialogue, background info, and surprising-even-me details. Because good characters can make or break your story!

Consider common editorial critiques (of the not-so-good kind): 

*Voice lacks 
*Flat characters 
*Sagging plots 
*Poor marketability 

A compelling cast of characters can fix all those problems. Maybe not quite so easily with a sagging plot, but even with plot, characters can come to the rescue. Following their lead can take a writer out of the messy middle and into an enviable ending. 

So how does one go about developing these awesome characters? Most often, we write what we know. Which brings me to a conversation I had recently with a friend who’s read my mystery. 

SHE: “So do you think Brunhilda (not her real name) will recognize herself in your novel?”

ME: “Ha!” 

Not that Brunhilda isn't a very clever gal but here's the thing when it comes to my character-building: Though there may be similar characteristics to someone I know, my characters are an amalgam of many friends, acquaintances, and family members, mixed in with my own attributes. So there may be something of Brunhilda in several characters, in both males and females, in teens and seniors. For me, creating a character is a sort of stroll down the Character Buffet Line, picking first this trait, then layering with this quirk, and possibly sprinkling with this accent. 

A word of caution, though. Choosing personality characteristics willy-nilly without thought as to why you’re developing a character in a certain direction will give you cardboard folks that won’t stand up through the story. Plus, it’s a bit lazy. 

Take the Southern character, for example. Throwing in a “y’all” every once in a while does not a Southerner make. Conversely, peppering every bit of dialogue with some kind of colorful Southern expression can get awfully tiring to the reader. And real Southerners don’t talk like that. 

Strive for authenticity. That’s why you look to people you know, how they talk, how they behave. But make the character your own. You want relatability; you don’t want to be sued (Or hurt anyone’s feelings). 

Next, consider using “like” experiences to give a character depth, especially if a character’s out of your wheelhouse. 

My novel has an ensemble of Southern ladies and as I know a lot of Southern ladies, developing each character, making them unique, was a lot of fun—and personal. There’s something of me in each character, even the Preacher’s Wife. 

Now, I am far from a preacher’s wife; I do know a preacher’s wife and that was helpful up to a point. But more helpful was my own experience as the Dean’s Daughter. 

Many years ago, I moved to a small Southern town with a college where my father was the academic dean. And yep, I was a student there. Like a preacher’s wife, I lived in a fishbowl. It was a completely different experience for me and it left a lasting impression, one I drew on to write the preacher’s wife.

So take the time to create authentic, interesting, compelling characters worthy of your story. After all, readers long remember the likes of Scarlett O’Hara and Rhett Butler. But all the thousands of details in between? They just might be gone with the wind!


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Dialogue: 5 Tips for Dazzling Dialogue

Monday, April 09, 2018
As I work through the pre-writing on my mystery and get closer to actually writing, I’ve been paying a lot of attention to fiction. Truth be told, mostly, I’m obsessing because I’m getting really worried about writing dialogue for my characters. Because of that, I’ve taken a brief class on dialogue and been doing a lot of reading. Here is a small part of what I’ve learned.

Dialogue in a story does not sound exactly like two people talking. In reality, we say things like umm and uhhh. And we backtrack. We are needlessly wordy. When you are writing, you have to smooth at least some of this out. Only James Joyce could get away with a page that is a single flow-of-conscious sentence. Do not try it. No one will thank you. I read Joyce in college. We didn’t even thank him.

Dialogue is not a ping pong match. When we write a conversation, we tend to have Person A ask a question which Person B then answers. Person A responds and then Person B comes back with something else. Change things up sometimes. Person A asks a question and Person B says something, but it isn’t a direct response. Why? Because Person B has their own agenda and dialogue is a great place to let that show.

Dialogue for each character should be unique. Even if you have ten characters in your story, I should be able to read a line of dialogue and know who said it. Each character needs a voice. To achieve this, use your copy and paste functions to place all of one character’s dialogue onto a page. Do this with each character and make sure each has their own vocabulary, sentence patterns and more.

Dialect must be spot on. If you want to give a feel for dialect you can use a key phrase such as my grandmother’s “God Bless Him.” My family just saw Three Billboards Outside Ebbing, Missouri. Not for a moment did we think it was set in Missouri because the dialogue was wrong. Yes, they had dialect coaches but they obviously weren’t from Missouri either. And don’t use “God Bless Him” unless you speak fluent Southern. It is not a blessing.

Dialogue should be read out loud. I know, I know. I already said that dialogue shouldn’t sound exactly like a person speaking. But it does need to flow and the best way to test that is to read it aloud. All of it. Better yet, get someone else to read it to you and pay attention to where they stumble or look confused.

Dialogue done well can pull a reader into the story. Dialogue done wrong can send them for the hills whether those hills are real or as fanciful as Ebbing, Missouri.

--SueBE

PS.  I do recommend 3 Billboards even if it wasn't set in Missouri.

To find out more about Sue Bradford Edwards' writing, visit her blog, One Writer's Journey.  Sue is also the instructor for Writing Nonfiction for Children and Young Adults. The next session begins May 7th, 2018.
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Oversharing in Dialogue and Why It's Not Good for Fiction Either

Tuesday, September 05, 2017
Dialogue is a tricky part of writing fiction. For some people, writing dialogue spills out of them naturally, and no one ever questions whether of not it "sounds real." That's the thing--dialogue is not really real--we don't want to read an entire conversation, starting with the "Hi, How's it going?" and ending with the "Okay, see you later." Every scene of dialogue has to move the story forward, and there has to be a point. So when someone says to make the dialogue sound natural, she doesn't really mean like a conversation we hear between two friends at the Olive Garden, but natural enough that readers are not taken out of the story.

Besides stilted dialogue, where every character sounds the same and the speech is too prim and proper, the worst dialogue offense is when characters overshare in a conversation. It's obvious an author is using this conversation as a device to share unknown information with the reader.

Here's an example:

"Honey, remember when you cheated on me with your secretary and I didn't talk to you for two weeks, and then I hired someone to sabotage your business?" Berta said as she took a bite of eggs in the tiny kitchen she shared with her husband.

"Yes, sweetie, of course. I was in prison for a year for fraud when I really did nothing wrong, but now I am blackmailing you to stay with me." Fred smiled over his pancakes.

So, that's a bit of an exaggeration, but since I critique a lot of novels and flash fiction, I read conversations where it is obvious that the author is trying to figure out how to work in the backstory the reader needs to know about these characters. But think about real life--in the above example, Berta would not even be talking to Fred, let alone reminding him of all the bad things she did to him out of spite.

How could you let the reader know that information without a big info dump or oversharing in dialogue? Try using actions and internal thoughts, surrounding the dialogue:

Berta stabbed her sausage link like she was murdering it. How did she end up back in this tiny kitchen table with her disgusting husband? "How's your new secretary working out?" It was ironic that now, Berta didn't care what Fred did with his secretary, and this one was twenty years older with a well-placed mole on her chin.

Fred's smile gave her chills. "She's great. Everything's just great. You know, new clients really trust an insurance man who spent a year in jail. It's at the top of everyone's list of what they want in a trusted relationship."  

Good, Berta thought. Nothing should be easy for that cheating, sarcastic, low-life bastard. Now she just had to figure out how to get out of this marriage with her reputation and bank account in check.

Readers don't know quite as much as they did with the first conversation, but they know enough to understand this dysfunctional marriage. Plus, in the second conversation, there's some mystery to exactly what happened, which will hopefully make readers flip the pages to find out.

Look at your current work-in-progress, and read your dialogue. Are your characters oversharing because you couldn't figure out how to fit in the backstory? Take it out and work it in another way. Think about how these two characters would act together if they were real and make your conversations sound "natural enough".

Margo L. Dill is a writer, editor, teacher, and writing coach, living in St. Louis, MO. Find out more about her novel writing class here. The next one starts the first Friday in October.  Find out more about her editing services here

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What Did They Say?

Thursday, February 16, 2012
Happy (belated) Valentine's Day!
Photo credit | Elizabeth K Humphrey
On February 14, I took my 10-year-old to see The Importance of Being Earnest at the local university. The performance, by the New York-based Aquila Theatre Company, moved the classic to modern day by adding a couple fun elements, such as inserting cellphones and contemporary music (where appropriate).

But, having seen the play before, it seemed to have remained true to the script.

If you're not familiar with the Oscar Wilde play, it premiered February 14, 1895, and turns on many social conventions of the day and two characters inventing fictitious people to avoid social events.

Initially I was concerned that because it was written so long ago, I would spend my time explaining the plot to my daughter. Or worse, answering, "What did they say?" in the crowded and darkened theatre. But not only did she laugh at most of the appropriate times, she seemed to get the story through the characters' dialogues.

Since the play, I have marveled at Wilde's ability to make his dialogues seem so timeless. In the same week, I have heard an interview with local actors about another performance (a David Mamet play) and read Vanity Fair's article about the movie Diner. (Note, however, that not every line was scripted in Diner.)

Dialogue reverberates through all the pieces and are essential to their successes.

In our own writing, dialogue is often the most difficult to capture, make so effortless, and stand the test of time.

Is there a movie or a play you admire for its dialogue? Then pick up a copy and pick it apart. Plays and screenplays can introduce you to many different types of dialogues and each line counts.

Important lessons when applying them to your own fiction.

What plays/movies/TV shows have you seen that capture strong dialogue and character interaction? What about a book? What books have the best dialogue in your opinion?

Elizabeth King Humphrey, a writer and editor, wishes everyone a  belated Happy Valentine's Day with hopes your holiday festivities produced as much chocolate as you desired. Have a writing or editing question--"tweet" me your question @Eliz_Humphrey and I'll do my best to answer it next time.
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Keeping Dialogue REAL

Sunday, February 20, 2011

Whoa, that convo would never take place!

Ever read a novel and have that thought come to mind while perusing the dialogue? That situation happened to me this week. Twice, in fact. One incident involved a YA novel. As an educator, I hear enough teen talk to know what's real and what's phony as a $3 bill. The other time I was critiquing a short story. Everything flowed in the piece, except the dialogue. Nothing like stealing that "feel good" feeling from a great piece of literature. (Insert frown here.)

Writers need to keep dialogue real; otherwise, readers will tune out. What are the best ways to pump up the reality volume of what your characters are saying? These tips will help you fine tune your characters' messages:
  • Listen and Learn Unless you isolate yourself from the outside world, conversations that you can learn from take place all the time. Call if eavesdropping, but if you just sit and listen to people talk, you'll learn to pick up speech patterns, key words, phrasing, and rhythm - all which will help you write a realistic scene. For example, I attended a comedy show last night and paid attention to the comedian riff with an audience member. The comedian used timing to his advantage, creating this natural conversation with the guy in the front row. As the dialogue continued, even the audience member seemed to pick up on the established rhythm the comedian employed. It was a perfect example of listening and learning how individuals talk and respond to each other. One of the best methods for improving dialogue technique may require popcorn. Watch a movie and discover how each character treats the dialogue. It's more than words. Dialogue also means you're creating a mood, setting up a reaction, and propelling a character into new situations.

  • Precision Trumps Surplus Once you've mastered listening, put your skills to the test. Dialogue shouldn't provide full disclosure. Instead, writers need to discern which information should be offered through dialogue. Info overload makes dialogue sound stilted. What's the best advice? Precision. Precision. Precision. A character's dialogue should make a point. Otherwise, it sounds fake.

  • The Rule of Three Repetition can be a writer's best tool to drive home a point. When writing stand up comedy, you give two examples and then bam! hit the audience with a twist the third time. It's the same "rule of three" idea with fiction. Writers employ a key word or phrase three times in a row to emphasize a point. Moderation is the key with the rule of three. Too much of a good thing makes dialogue sound phony.

  • Speak Up Once you've completed a scene, read it aloud. Do the words match the intended tone and message? Or does the conversation sound bogus? Sometimes I'll record a scene as a .wav or MP3 file, play it back, and hear where changes are needed. If you're part of a critique group, read snippets of dialogue to group members and use their input to decide whether or not the words flow or if the conversation needs to be rewritten.

Perhaps Alfred Hitchcock summed up realistic dialogue when he said, "Dialogue should simply be a sound among other sounds, just something that comes out of the mouths of people whose eyes tell the story in visual terms."

Strong, realistic dialogue adds a powerful element to a story. It's a sound clip, a byte of everyday life inserted into a new situation. Make your sound clip worth listening to.


by LuAnn Schindler. A freelance journalist, more of LuAnn's writing can be found at her website.

Graphic design by LuAnn Schindler


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