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Friday Speak Out!: Being Nosy Made Me a Better Writer

Friday, May 12, 2017

by H. Lovelyn Bettison

I've always been a bit of a nosy Nancy. Even as a child eating dinner with my family in the local diner, the conversation at the booth behind us seemed a lot more interesting than what was going on at our table. Then my eavesdropping was a bit more apparent. I'd turn around in my seat to face the people whose conversation I was not so discreetly overhearing. My parents didn't seem to mind, and I was a clueless five-year-old who hadn't yet mastered the fine art of eavesdropping.

As I grew up, I learned to be stealthier, but I still couldn't help myself. Some conversations are too juicy to ignore, like the tragic breakup I overheard at a truck stop when I was in college. I sat enthralled slowly eating my French fries as the sobbing woman seated in the booth behind me begged her boyfriend for a second chance. That incident inspired one of my first attempts at writing flash fiction.

Do you ever catch a little snippet of conversation and then find yourself wondering what on earth is going on? You overhear the guy walking by you on his cell phone say, "That would be a perfect place to hide a body." Propelled by curiosity, you follow him for a few blocks trying to hear every word he says into his phone. Then you realize that if he notices what you're doing, he might be trying to hide your body next. That's never happened to me either, but wouldn't it be interesting if it did?

Friends and family find my habit of overhearing things a bit annoying, but when it came time for me to write my first novel, I realized that I wasn't nosy I was studying. Listening in on other people's conversations helped me understand the ebb and flow of natural dialogue. I paid attention to the type of words people used when they spoke to each other and how they paused in between those words. Various speech patterns and cadences were second nature to me.

If you find yourself struggling with dialogue, go out and practice your nosiness. Eavesdropping can do more than improve your written dialogue; it can inspire new plot lines. Visit your local coffee shop or the grocery store with a purpose in mind. See how many snippets of conversations you can overhear. I like to make this into a bit of an exercise.

I'll go someplace and listen to the people around me until I find a fascinating piece of conversation It could be something totally outrageous that makes me wonder, or it could be something a bit more mundane said in an unusual way. I like to use those pieces of conversations as jumping-off points for stories.

Don't be shy. Get out and start eavesdropping today. When it comes time to write your next story, you'll be glad you did.

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Friday Speak Out!: Being Nosy Made Me a Better Writer
 is a writer who lives in St. Petersburg, Florida. She writes subtle love stories with supernatural elements. Find out more about her books on her website. lovelynbettison.com

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Friday Speak Out!: Your Bird and Your Dog, or Rob a Shop

Friday, March 11, 2016
by Hazel Butler

When I was first learning to write, I spent days on an exercise designed to help me pen realistic dialogue.

Step 1: Carry a notebook everywhere.
Step 2: Write down everything you say, and everything said to you.

The result?

Pages saturated with the loneliness of my childhood. Arguing parents, cruel peers, and numerous conversations with Sam.

Sam was my dog, and he seldom spoke.

Nobody wanted to read the dialogue of my life. This realisation led to habitual eavesdropping.

I currently have noisy neighbours. Every time I try to write, they start screaming. I’ve dedicated some time to writing the saga unfolding next door: Why did she leave him? Why did she returned? Had he cheated? Was she paranoid? And who the hell threw the brink through the front window?

She thought it was one of his whores.

He claimed it was random.

It turned out the shady activities she’d interpreted as infidelity were actually a result of secret debts. It came to a head the night after the incident with the brick. I was making a cup of tea when, clear as a bell, I hear her berating him, “How are you this thick? Your fool mate isn’t going to get you a clean gun!”

I was frozen, teaspoon in hand, staring at the kitchen wall, silently thinking, Sorry, love, but he really is that thick.

He'd set upon the notion of robbing a shop. He'd arranged to borrow a gun for the escapade and was convinced it was The Answer.

She informed him, in her typically blunt manner, that he'd be caught, sent down, and have an unsolved murder (linked to the unclean gun) pinned on him.

If he walked out the door, neither she nor his dog would be there when he got back.

It was a reasonable ultimatum, the kind I’d make in her position, but it was the way she said it that floored me. I’d have written, “If you walk out, we won’t be here when you get back.” Or, “Do this, and I’ll leave you!”

Never in a million years would I have come out with the perfect line she delivered:

"Your bird and your dog, or rob a shop."

The most sublime line imaginable. There was my story, in a furious and lusty little nutshell.

Your bird and your dog, or rob a shop.

I would never refer to myself as anyone’s ‘bird’ or use the third person in that context.

I don’t know anyone who would.

We all have our walks in life. There is a limit to our social spheres. Yet characters should come a range of backgrounds and cultures, all of which have unique phrases and inflections.

As a writer it's easy to get lost in your own head. But even with your expansive imagination your internal world(s) have limits.

To write compelling dialogue, focus not on yourself but on strangers.

Listen.

Scribble in your notebook.

One day, someone may grace you with the most perfect line imaginable.

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Hazel Butler is a freelance writer and author of urban and dark fantasy. Her published works include Chasing Azrael (myBook.to/chasingazrael), an urban fantasy mystery with a Gothic twist, and Bleizgeist (myBook.to/bleizgeist), a dark fantasy novella about a young woman’s unusual magic, and struggle for acceptance in a harsh world.
Hazel blogs for The Huffington Post (www.huffingtonpost.co.uk/hazel-butler), runs The Bipolar Bear (www.bipolarbear.co.uk), a site dedicated to raising awareness of mental illness, and The Bookshine Bandit (www.bookshinebandit.com), a small business offering services for self-publishing authors. You can find her on her website (www.hazel-butler.com), Facebook (www.facebook.com/HazelJaneButler), Twitter (www.twitter.com/hazel_butler), Instagram (www.instagram.com/hazelherself) and Pinterest (www.pinterest.com/hazelherself).

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