Showing posts with label reader empathy. Show all posts
Showing posts with label reader empathy. Show all posts

The Bigger the Stakes, The Bigger the Fall

Wednesday, September 13, 2023

I was catching up on my blog reading the other day when I read an insightful post by Nathan Bransford on story stakes – The More the Character Puts in a Bucket, the More There Is to Spill. Admittedly, my first thought when I read the title was “no kidding.” But I’m accustomed to finding treasures among Bransford’s posts so I read on. 

And, yes, I discovered another insight. Too often, our characters are skipping along, having an amazing day when disaster strikes. We expect readers to empathize with our characters because disaster is bad. But if we want to keep our readers engaged, we need to do better. There’s no taking the easy way. 

Bransford’s point was that if your character has already put a ton of effort into something, and then it goes wrong? That’s huge. We’ve all been there and so have our readers. 

Let’s say, for the sake of an example, that your character is a seamstress who has been making a princess-worthy wedding dress for her daughter. Her fingers hurt. She has eye strain. And she’s short on sleep, but three days before the wedding she is ready for the final fitting. That’s when her daughter tells her that she’s calling off the wedding. 

It sounds like the set up for a Gen X rom com, doesn’t it? Mom has serious investment in this dress which has one big day to shine. Now her efforts may never been seen. That’s going to create a lot more tension than if the character was having a lovely cuppa in her garden when she got a phone call that the wedding was off. 

What if your story was a mystery? Your character is a freelancer (how ever did I think of that?) and also a dog walker because she has bills to pay. Recently someone started a dog walking club. Get out and get fit and have fun with your pooch! This is really eating into your character’s ability to keep the lights on. She’s trying to figure out how to get her customers back when she finds the woman who organized the dog walking club dead in the park where everyone, including her and her few remaining dogs, walks. In addition to the trauma of finding the body, now she must find the killer to prove that she didn’t do it. 
 
Tipping over the character’s plans is a great way to create a disaster that is a natural fit for your story. If you can do that, it won’t feel contrived and it will give your character a lot to lose if things don’t get straightened out. 

Now, if you’ll excuse me, I need to make some changes to my WIP. 

--SueBE

Sue Bradford Edwards' is the author of 40 books for young readers.  
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Empathy and Mystery Hook Your Reader

Wednesday, April 15, 2015
I’ll be one of the first people to admit it. I’m a fickle pickle of a reader. Fail to hook me in about 20 pages, if I’m feeling generous, and I close your book and move on to the next. Thank goodness for my library card.

A lot of writers try to open with an exciting, seat-of-your pants scene to hook the reader. Sometimes it works. Other times it doesn’t. Too much drama, too early on can make your reader roll her eyes. It’s too much too soon so it seems overdone.

Instead, give your reader a reason to empathize. Stir up her curiosity.

I’m reading Empty Mansions: The Mysterious Life of Huguette Clark and the Spending of a Great American Fortune by Bill Dedman and Paul Clark Newell. When I started the book, I didn’t know who Huguette Clark was so that wasn’t going to work as a hook.

Instead, Dedman relies on reader empathy. He tells about his search for a new home and, finding nothing in his market, searching way up the scale. At one time or another, whether we were car shopping or shoe shopping, we’ve all failed to love what we could afford and ended up looking beyond our price range. We get it and we empathize.

Dedman saw something about an enormous gated home in the area. He wasn’t allowed on the grounds, but the caretaker divulged the owner’s name – Huguette Clark. The man had held the job for years but never met Ms. Clark. Then Dedman chanced upon a second Clark property when he was in California with much the same results. He was determined to find out about this mysterious woman who owned, but never visited, luxury properties.

Talk about a great way to hook the reader – mystery piled on top of mystery.

When the reader meets Huguette Clark, she is an old woman being visited by a doctor who doesn’t actually know her. While he anticipates eccentric, he doesn’t expect a woman whose face is so ravished by cancer that she hides behind a towel.

We all know what it’s like to be embarrassed but . . . wow. How can you not feel for this woman and wonder what led to this situation?

Dedman didn’t start the book with a car crash or a natural disaster which he could have done. After all, Huguette had a ticket for the Titanic. Instead, he starts the story by hooking us with a mystery and building empathy for this amazing character, a character who just happens to be real.

Can you use any of these techniques to hook your readers?

--SueBE

SueBE teaches our course, Writing Nonfiction for Children and Young Adults.  The next section start May 4, 2015.

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